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The winner of The Attention Contest is Lukeout. I have edited his piece and republished it below. I gave it a heavy edit, but no more than a magazine editor would do for an unknown writer. I found the piece to be interesting, inspiring, and to the point. That's rare.

You probably wonder why I didn't pick one of the entries that had far more reader votes. I rejected bathroom humor, anything that seemed dated, anything that seemed familiar (derivative), and anything that couldn't be brought to a professional level with editing.

I agree that the top vote-getters were quite fun and funny. Good job. And thank you to all who entered.

And now the winner...

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Pick up the Phone

I was a 24-year old, third-shift chemist, living in a tiny town in Pennsylvania, dreaming of being a hobby game designer - for games such as Warhammer, and Magic the Gathering.

One day, by a freak of randomness, I was asked to play-test a game that was being designed by a local artist. I arrived at the artist's studio, and took a seat with a few other play-testers. As the night progressed, I learned that this artist, Keith Parkinson, was not only a nice guy, but also famous and important. Keith was an icon of fantasy art awesomeness. I learned that his art appeared on some of the best fantasy and sci-fi products ever made. Over the course of the night, the pressure of working with a legend began to sink in. The situation was intimidating, even though he couldn't have been a nicer guy. I found it strange and fascinating that his fame had such an effect on me.

Unfortunately, his game was terrible. The characters were great, but the mechanics just weren't up to snuff. That night, I wrote up six pages of notes on how to make his game better. It was a brutal review. The next day, I read over my notes and decided to call Keith, to see if I could stop by and go over my thoughts. This was far beyond what was expected of a play tester. I was scared to death to make the call. I must have stared at the phone for fifteen minutes before dialing.

Keith answered and was receptive to hearing my feedback. I was in his studio delivering my bad review within an hour. Within two hours, he had offered me a job helping with his game. That was sixteen years ago. I've been happily working as a game designer ever since.

Keith died a few years back, and I miss him greatly. Whenever I look at two of his paintings that proudly hang in my office, I'm reminded to pick up the phone when I have something useful to say, no matter if the news is good or bad, and no matter to whom I'm delivering it. I'm also sure to listen when someone calls me with something to say. Keith showed me that there's more to art than what hangs on the wall.

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The latest game designed (and sometimes marketed) by the author is called Bakugan, published by Spin Master.

 
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May 26, 2010
Very nice Lukeout.
I hate finishing second in these contests. I was second, wasn’t I? Scott? Hello? I could have sworn that he picked up the phone…
 
 
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May 25, 2010
Your entry resonated strongly with me. WHile the line of boy who are Bakugan fans is endless, the number whose father is a huge fans of the Warhammer universe and early Magic the Gathering sets (Blue and White for the win!) is probably a significantly shorter list. The details, though, were just distractors from the Aesop like fable that applies to a call I am avoiding to criticize someone's website.

P.S. Lukeout- if you have any mint condition original Enemy Within campaign materials taking up too much space in your garage, I will gladly give them a loving home ;)
 
 
May 25, 2010
BAKUGAN!!! As the mother of two boys I have a suggestion for improvement. Make Bakugan cards that can survive the washing machine. The little ball guys are great though since they do not hurt (much) when I step on them but the new pointy battle gear is painful (but not as bad as Legos).

Congratulations.
 
 
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May 25, 2010
I'm very disappointed that the story about the resume cover was stollen from another blog. I liked it so much!
But congratulations to Lukeout, his was one of the comments I voted with a thumb up (and I read them all).
 
 
May 25, 2010
Congratulations, Lukeout! Great entry. Good luck with that whole world domination thing.

This contest was a blast. I met a lot of interesting people through it. Thanks for letting us join in.
 
 
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May 25, 2010
Nice job, Luke!

Staring at the phone for 15 minutes reminded me of my first cold-call sales job! (LOL!) It was almost as bad as the poem I submitted for this contest! (Hahaha!)
 
 
May 25, 2010
Nice one Luke, surely well deserved.

It chimed with some advice a previous boss used to ram into us - that any time you get feedback is a heaven sent opportunity to raise your game, show great form etc. My philosophy since has always been to hear people out properly no matter what their demeanour may be. As bosses go he was pretty enlightened - mind you he did like that seemingly Catbert-inspired tome 'Who moved my cheese?'
 
 
May 25, 2010
Great going Lukeout!! Just wanted to know for reference, how many votes did he manage to get from readers...

Good luck with your career option on blogging.
 
 
May 24, 2010
Great job Lukeout! The story reminds me a great deal of the content in Last Lecture, and I'm glad to add "pick up the phone" to the things I learned from Randy Pausch in that book.
 
 
May 24, 2010
Ouch, ouch ouch! 'Pick Up the Phone' reached me on lots of points, and the edit was sensitively done too. I didn't read any other entries nor follow the whole exercise very much, but this was good! Thanks for the opportunity.
 
 
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May 24, 2010
Congrats Lukeout. Excellent story!
 
 
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May 24, 2010
RIP Keith. He is missed.
 
 
May 24, 2010
Yep, it was better than my submission.
 
 
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May 24, 2010
Yea for me!

Good edits BTW. Now, to leverage this victory into world domination, or at least a career in blog commenting! (if I can just keep all these passwords straight...)

Thanks for all the nice words everybody, it's rare to meet people like Keith, and it's amazing how they can change the trajectory of those they interact with.

Luke
 
 
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May 24, 2010
Yes I liked that story too. It reminded of these lyrics:

Look, if you had one shot, or one opportunity
To seize everything you ever wanted-One moment
Would you capture it or just let it slip?
(eminem)
 
 
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May 24, 2010
I thought this was a great story and I had voted for it. But I still liked the resume writing tips by creamcitian better, so I wondered why Scott hadn't chosen that one. So I did a little Google search and found this 2007 article http://fasterthantheworld.com/2006/10/resume_writing_tips_the_four_s.html

It's the same thing verbatim. So either creamcitian is Wilhelm, or he's a plagiarist. It's still a great article and I'm glad creamcitian shared it, but if he didn't write it, he should have given the author credit. Good catch Scott.
 
 
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May 24, 2010
Fabulous story. Giving feedback can be really scary and so many people avoid doing it for that very reason. Well done for being brave enough to do it.

It's great to read a feedback success story like this.

 
 
May 24, 2010
Way to go, Lukeout!

Great story, and a great reminder that anyone can have something meaningful to say or contribute, not just the "big" people.

Congrats to you for being brave enough to take that risk!
 
 
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May 24, 2010
:) I went thru a 2-min hassle of resetting my password, just to log in and say

that's real nice
 
 
May 24, 2010
Nice choice
 
 
 
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